It had to be...good work.x
Standing on the brink of more than just a stretch of water...
A great little poem, Dominic, and nicely paired with the lovely photo.
Great rhythm and resonance. You're a clever lad. I can never get words to rhyme and make wonderful musical sense like this.
Nice write (god that always sounds so wrong when I read back, nice)Really pulls you both ways"Look to the front,admire the view:it won't do to look back,it just won't do."
Dominic, you dominate words and your mastery is lovely. The idea of the inevitable gives me chills. Already just between the first three Bus Riders, I can envision a little Poetry Bus book with this photo on the cover. It would be a beautiful little book.
Thanks for these comments, everyone.
loved the flow
Hello! Your poem resonated with me in a deep, soulful way. I loved it!
Interesting take on the boat pic and not all that far away from my take on the same picture.
I like it! I haven't posted my poem yet, but it has a simliar theme. Only I'm pretty sure I'm not getting in the boat...
Excellent! Hooray for metrical verse!
Succinct and snappy. It does it for me.
writing something so apparently simple is one of the most difficult poetic tasks--you've succeeded brilliantly!
I do like the simplicity.Of course, it means you're not rowing away, you have to look behind then. Maybe that's another poem
Perfect poem for August. Blessings!
I really enjoyed this one.
Janus and the Argonauts!Short, sweet and deeper than that water. I loved it. Especially that opening,"Sooner or laterthis had to be.I'd come to the water..."All boats so far! Who's got hands?
great stuff dominic, sad and yet fulfilling
it just won't do! Kind of reminded me of a horror film. Don't look back!
Assertive Fact!Don't look back!Nice poem:)
tones of row row row your boat.. :-)and there's nothing wrong with that!
That's lovely, Dominic, serene and sad but looking forward.
Thanks for these comments everybody.
Nice and simple, but not. You know what I mean?Katthe word is "kness" (not quite "knees", but almost).
Hi Dominic,I like the title you've chosen for your poem. The boat waiting to take you there . . . serene and hopeful.
Nice one Dominic, I'm dreading heading for that boat.It's the 'alone' bit that freaks.And where the feck are we going? If anywhere.Great poem, comrade.
Thanks for these comments, everyone. One specific: yes, Kat, I think I know what you mean. There is a narrow dividing line between Stevie Smith-like simplicity and greeting card verse.
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