Saturday, 27 March 2010


Two poems this week: one -Stone- for the TFE Poetry Bus, being expertly driven this week by Rachel Fox. Another poem -Elegy for Patrick- sneaked on without a ticket while the driver wan't looking. This stowaway is a poem I wrote a long time ago about someone who was very important to me. I have recently revised it.


Is it

A lintelstone
waiting for the door
to be opened

A hearthstone
waiting for the fire
to be set

A millstone
waiting for the wheat
to be harvested

A boundarystone
waiting for the land
to be disputed

A milestone
waiting for the road
to go somewhere

A gravestone
waiting for the settlers
to settle down

An altar stone
waiting for something
to be given

Or just a stone,
waiting for the sun

to rise

and touch it?

Elegy for Patrick

OK, so the Irish songs you taught me


The Solitary Walker said...

Dominic - these are astoundingly good. I remember that 1st poem from when we spent a weekend with you - perhaps 25 years ago? Shows how some poems can stick in the mind.

Word verification: beation (beatific creation?)

Dominic Rivron said...

Thanks for that, SW. I'm pleased it stuck in your mind. I once sent it off with a few others to get published - with no luck.

Anonymous said...

The Elegy is so poignant, captures so much about Ireland and its history just beautifully.
And loved the Stone too, real sense of endurance.
thanks for sharing

Niamh B said...

Both are beautiful - the Elegy one is really touching. Glad you stowed it in there.

Karen said...

Both of these are beautiful, Dominic. The imagery of stones is full and strong. The elegy is just wonderful.

My word verification: (since we're talking words, here) mastr

Methinks you are!

Enchanted Oak said...

I liked both your offerings very much. But I dearly love stones, and that work of yours is extremely clever. I like the various passages and journeys it describes via the stones.
I'll ride the Poetry Bus tomorrow. Please visit me?

Jeanne Iris said...

Well, my word verification is 'supter' but the first thought that came to my mind was the manner by which you lead the reader through a beautiful human journey with your textual 'scepter.' Thank you, Dominic!

Rachel Fox said...

It's the simple words that get me every time! I love the choice of 'stone' and the poem is strong and intelligent (though I'm not sure about the end...just not sure...I want to trim it a little... ). I love the 'milestone' touch most of all in it. I wonder how long the milestones we see around the UK will last?


Ann said...

I enjoyed both of these poems. Beautiful!

Totalfeckineejit said...

Two fine poems Dominic.Stone is fab and 25 years old? It will last forever, bit like the stones.(Not The Rolling Stones)Love the final lines of the sun touching a stone, as though the stone could feel.

was Patrick your father-in-law? Fine poem.Deadly ending too.

The Weaver of Grass said...

Love the first one - I kept trying to think of other stones you could add - it is such an elemental thing stone and has such a deep meaning.
As for the second poem, well it brought Paddy back to life for me at any rate.

Titus said...

I find the elegy an astoundingly good poem, immediate and intense and sorrowful and so human.

Really enjoyed Stone too, especially the milestone stanza.

Rachel Fenton said...

Found both of these really moving.

The imagery and the way the elegy just slipped in and had my insides slide out like an oyster.

Dominic Rivron said...

Thanks for these comments, everybody. One specific:

TFE: Yes, Patrick was my father-in-law. I remember writing about him elsewhere (where? I'm not sure!*), about how he had known, when little, at least one of the people whose name crops up in Christy Moore's Viva la Quince Brigada and the part he played in setting up the memorial in Manchester to the International Brigades that fought in Spain.

*I suspect it was something to do with that fantastic photo of yours of the balloon seller in Manchester.

the watercats said...

The elegy poem is just stunning! I could feel the emotion running through it... and it is written in such a dreamlike way, or at least reveals images that way.
The stone poem is bloomin marvellous too!.. :-)
too much talent... too much! :-D

Peter Goulding said...

Yes, the elegy poem is very powerful, particularly with that explosive last line.

evalinn said...

Nice, I like them! :-)

Argent said...

Stone was super - I love things like this, so many different uses of a stone. Elegy is very well crafted for me. A light touch with the brush and the down-to-earth unsentimental language makes it all the stronger. How on earth did it not get published?

Word verification: Pasts. Spooky!

NanU said...

Wonderful poems both.
I love the patience of the stones. A quality we could learn from them.

Pure Fiction said...

I agree with Argent - can't believe Elegy didn't get published.
I really love both of these - they're just two very good poems, both quite different, but both asking to be read again. (and again)