Monday, 15 February 2010

Moebius Love Poem

One for the TFE Poetry Bus

Take a strip of paper:
twist it once and then
glue the ends together
so that when
you run your finger
along one side, it turns
into the other side.

This is extraordinary,
you think. A one-sided
piece of paper,
proclaiming the reality
of strangeness
in a world full of
two-sided pieces of paper.

Somehow we got twisted up
like this, so that
when I run my finger
along your side,
I'm no longer sure
where you end
and I begin.

24 comments:

Poetikat said...

Wow! That was extraordinary, Dominic!

Kat

Get Off My Lawn! said...

"Closer than a sister to her baby brother, closer than a cat to the child that she'll smother. Too close for a lover. We are each other." (Beautiful South). You reminded me of this song. A bit of the creepy side of togetherness.

Rachel Fenton said...

I love moebius strip poems!

Liz said...

Great concept...great poem...enjoyed it a lot. cheers!

Niamh B said...

As this is my first moebius strip poem, I can't generalise, but I can say I do love this one!

the watercats said...

I don't even know what a moeb.. a mo.. amobiu... (one of those poems) is!.. but I like it A LOT! gently intense... nice :-)

Elisabeth said...

This is wonderful, Dominic, so clear and yet it has so many layers. Bravo.

Uiscebot said...

Brilliant poem - and I know the feeling! Great idea, simple and strong.

PS: I got a paper cut

willow said...

Origami love!

Pauline said...

lovely! An unexpected love poem.

Pure Fiction said...

Beautiful - coming at the whole idea of romantic love from a very different angle.

Titus said...

Good one, Dominic. That strong, simple image, beautifully explored in the second stanza, is so apt and well-realised.
Yep, strong and pure.

Rachel Fox said...

Let's hear it for the running fingers!
x

Emerging Writer said...

Made me go "oo" out loud. Really lovely

John Hayes said...

Beautiful in concept & execution. Very well done!

crazyfieldmouse said...

A wonderful analogy, and beautifully executed.
thanks for sharing
crazy field mouse

The Weaver of Grass said...

Beautiful. The best.

Karen said...

I'm late getting here, so it's all been said. So, yeah...what they said! Love it!

Totalfeckineejit said...

Deadly one Dominic!

Dominic Rivron said...

Thanks for these comments, everybody.

ArtSparker said...

Sweet valentine.

swiss said...

a maths poem! good show! i'm most impressed.

Sorlil said...

I really like this, really nicely done.

BarbaraS said...

A good metaphor - well done!