Sunday, 21 February 2010


One for the TFE Poetry Bus

Where I once was
is now
the dark interior
of that skull
that seems to watch
the passers by
that stop to read
the label: homo
sapiens circa

Look into my eyes
as I would, yours:
you are the effect
and I, the cause.


John Hayes said...

That last stanza has me in a stew--but I like it!

Poet in Residence said...

Alas poor Yorik! You knew him well?

tony said...

yes.Yes.I Like This.

The Weaver of Grass said...

I shall have to think about those last two lines - not sure I can get my head round it - shall have to get together with John Hayes it seems.

Karen said...

The date on the skull and those last lines are sort of chilling. I like.

Argent said...

Yes, I get a vague sense of menace from this too - without understanding quite why.

the watercats said...

Really like this.. it's like a poem a serial killer would read to his new victim just before he turned her into a patio... :-)

Titus said...

Dominic, this is something special, and that last verse is the endless question of origins to me. Loved it.

Poetikat said...

Where others are remarking on the last stanza, I find the "where I once was" line most intriguing.
Well done, Dominic!

Typical man—not terribly forthcoming and reserved.

(What? No handbag?)


Anonymous said...

scary and disturbing, but as Argent says, without being able to quite put your finger on why. very subtle.
thanks for sharing
crazy field mouse

Pure Fiction said...

I'm not entirely sure what to make of this.I think the whole pocket thing might be getting in my way.
But I love the way the last few lines resonate - You are the effect and I, the cause.

Connie T. said...

I like this poem you made.

Dominic Rivron said...

Thanks for these comments, everybody.

Alas poor Yorik! The skull is from The Miracle of Life, a very old book I keep close by for illustrations to scan.

And no, no handbag - just a cranium.

Lyn said...

Cause and effect..inseperable, what's first, what's last??
Really like this...

Domestic Oub said...

Ooh, love this one :) Especially the end.

Totalfeckineejit said...

Chilling and cool!

Dave King said...

I agree with John - the last stan za's the killer!