Monday, 26 October 2009

Threnody for the Victims of Hiroshima



20 comments:

John Hayes said...

It seems the concrete poem really works to try to capture what is really "too horrific for words." The fact that it is a concrete poem & is about "sight" is also interesting!

Titus said...

Dominic, you have a lot to answer for!
That aside, I like your concrete ones very much, and this is no exception.
I particularly like the first four lines, and the just perceptible difference in colouration of the final line. I like the fineness and restraint of this as a response.

Must ask: is it about the event, rather than the music, or does the music give you entry to the event? It's been interesting thus far to read the poems of those who didn't know what the music was "about".

Sandra Leigh said...

Confession: I have no idea what a concrete poem is. That said, I like the economy of this poem, and the interplay between the words and the font/colour.

Rachel Fox said...

The final flash...that's a great line and it's perfect for this poem and subject.
x

Niamh B said...

You do have a lot to answer for...!

But it's been an interesting one so far, looking forward to see what everyone else comes up with.
I like your interpretation

P Nolan said...

Harsh. Bright. Just. Right.

Poet in Residence said...

Hiroshima Noiseless Flash Fire Panic Grass Feverfew Aftermath
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willow said...

Listen to the sound of the light.

Perfect.

(love how the text fades to the end)

The Weaver of Grass said...

Very impressive.

NanU said...

Yes.

swiss said...

nice. like it.


but you're still the culprit!

Jeanne Iris said...

Nicely concise... you've captured the sensory assault beautifully!

Totalfeckineejit said...

Amazing the responses Dominic, perhaps the mostdivisive yet.I think that reflects the absolute power of the piece, it's effectiveness.Just like the event it depicts (and that's why I didn't want people to know the title)it rouss different emotions reactions , denials, acceptances, horror, refusals.

This is really good Dominic,achieved in just a few words 'listen to the sound' is exactly what i wanted people to try and do, with mixed results.

Thanks for the introduction to this difficult piece.

Karen said...

This is an excellent response to the music. The light and the fading away totally capture the event - a marriage of sight and sound.

Poetikat said...

You had the distinct advantage of knowing the entire title of the piece. I do like the concrete image of the fading words in the gradient of blues.
I enjoyed this exercise, surprisingly, so I thank you.

Wigeon said...

Thanks Dominic - what a challenge that was! Actually, apart from the grim tone of the music it was amazing to see what came out from my pen and from others who took up the challenge too. I'm so pleased I didn't know the full title.

I really like your own contribution and as for the fading of words on the way down - it's wonderful. Your art and poetry is a successful mix .....and it compliments your task of music and poetry.
Thanks .....I think!

the broken down barman said...

LIGHT HEAT PAIN DEATH

Dominic Rivron said...

Thanks for these comments everyone - much appreciated.

I've a lot of catching up to do as we've just got back off holiday (Wales) so I'll just pick up on a couple of points:

1 A response to the piece or the event? Both. A response to the musical response to the event.

2 A concrete poem -a quick definition- is one which in which the visual presentation of the words on the page play a major part in conveying the meaning of the poem. (E.g., a poem about a fish in which the words are arranged in the shape of a fish).

6p00d83451947569e2 said...

Absolutely compelling, Dominic. Thank you for this.

Hem said...

This blog is very interesting
Thank you

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