Monday, 28 September 2009

Busy, busy, busy...

Just had a very busy -and pleasant- weekend, so I've not been able to write what I intended to. So, instead, I'm posting a couple of short poems which were spin-offs of earlier TFE Monday projects:


5 minute haiku

Sat in the bathroom
with a blank piece of paper.
What to write? Time's up!


Poem

It's late: dark rain
rattles on the glass. The wind
moans like a pessimist and I
must make the effort to get up
from my chair and go to bed!




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14 comments:

The Weaver of Grass said...

It seems to me that both those poems really come from the heart! Take it a bit easier this week please!

Titus said...

I laughed out loud at the haiku and the poem describes something I experience nearly every night.
So bravo.

Totalfeckineejit said...

Well Dominic I've linked you in as it's still a virtual Monday poetry post.As the founder member of PAH! (Poets against Haiku) I have to confess I almost enjoyed the first one(that's far ,far, higher praise than it might seem!)The second one is brilliant and sums up my nocturnal existence!

Jeanne Iris said...

What?! There's a PAH society?! Horrors... As Haiku Queen of page 23 of the Haiku Club thread on The S. Fly, I knight you, Sir Dominic! : )

Niamh B said...

Aren't haikus normally supposed to include something about nature...? .... oh....(penny drops)...... never mind.

the watercats said...

ahh I know that feeling of having to go to bed.... if I had my way i would be perpetually asleep on the sofa.. (warmer downstairs).
Two nice wee things with a hearty dose of realism.. cheers !

Dominic Rivron said...

WG: Yes they do, and I'll try.

Titus: I almost called the second one "Blogger"!

TFE: Thanks. Perhaps I should start PAPAH!* :) Seriously, part of me agrees with you - but another part gets drawn back to them from time to time, especially when they're robust (for want of a better word), startling, incongruous, etc. (Ah, I've just remembered the raft! That seems like ages ago!)

*Then you could start a PAPAPAH! (etc. etc.)

JI: Thank you, Your Highness :)

Niamh: Yes. I'd not thought about that - I tend to just write whatever I feel like. I like to think it's the haiku-equivalent of those toilet-paper adverts that are just a little too graphic that come on TV just as you're having your tea.

watercats: it's a common experience for a lot of us I suspect. Reading this and other similar comments, it strikes me quite forcibly what a potent force "realism" is.

Niamh B said...

lol - know the ones you mean!

Argent said...

Hehe, delicious, both of these! I did laugh at the haiku and the feeling of that second one was sooo familiar.

Emerging Writer said...

Moans like a pessimist - nice

Rachel Fenton said...

I could start Writers Opposing Poets Against Haiku (WOPAH)! It would be big, it would be a whopper! Or, maybe not...dum de dum...

I liked them both. Wanted to pop a blanket over the second one and leave it in its chair.

Dominic Rivron said...

Argent: Thanks. As I said to watercats, realism is a powerful thing.


EW: Thanks. I know of no other examples, but I'm sure i can't be the first to use this simile.


RF: Thank you for the kind thought - but there's nothing worse than waking up in a chair at 3am, aching all over.. You wish you'd gone to bed earlier when you do!

Dominic Rivron said...

Argent: Thanks. As I said to watercats, realism is a powerful thing.


EW: Thanks. I know of no other examples, but I'm sure i can't be the first to use this simile.


RF: Thank you for the kind thought - but there's nothing worse than waking up in a chair at 3am, aching all over.. You wish you'd gone to bed earlier when you do!

dick said...

Neat and punchy, both.