Friday, 27 March 2009

Prophet

He tried to imagine
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8 comments:

Totalfeckineejit said...

'Pete the bouncer looked mean' - Deadly, never thought of it that way before and you have a real spacey alien vibe goin on of late -Tell me,is this a constant or a recurring vision Mr Rivron?

John Hayes said...

Enjoyed this-- especially the lines "After that/he left the curtains open"

Thanks for posting this.

BarbaraS said...

Oh yes, that last line is so true. It's what stops people writing, sometimes...

The Weaver of Grass said...

Human language is like a cracked kettle on which we beat out tunes for bears to dance to, when all the time we are longing to move the stars to pity. (Flaubert)

Seems your prophet would be better leaving the curtains closed and getting some sleep - as he says "it has all been said before anyway". As usual with your poetry - love it.

Dominic Rivron said...

Thanks for these comments.

TFE: I often wonder about the alien vibe. It pops up now and again. I think I'm interested in our fantasies about aliens, in aliens as a device - imaginary beings who tell us more about ourselves than anything else, perhaps. Or perhaps that's bull and I'm just attracted to the stuff of "good-bad" fiction.

JH: I'm pleased you said that. I nearly crossed that bit out!

B: True. Potential trouble with both the world and oneself.

WG: Thanks for this - I didn't know the Flaubert quote.

The Solitary Walker said...

Love it, love it.

Poetikat said...

I liked "Someone had chained the fire exits"
and
"It had all been thought of before"

I can't help but think of Sam Tyler in "Life on Mars".

I really like the form of this piece - the pace of it.

Kat

Dominic Rivron said...

SW: Thanks for that.

Poetikat: I'm pleased you like it. I've never watched Life on Mars, though you have now piqued my curiosity.