Tuesday, 28 October 2008

Barn

I remember my making -
a growing shadow in a ring of stones.

Since then, a stone
here and there, a rotting beam, the slate
that slips by inches every year:
the light creeps in. It seems to be
a universal principle.

Stone is my mantra.
Solid ground my only reassurance
that I'm part of something bigger.

One day I'll be full of light:
a field of stones
for people to pick over
in search of artefacts.

8 comments:

BarbaraS said...

Thanks for stopping by Dominic and leaving your take on reviews. I've been having a bit of a browse and I like what I see. Barn, especially.

The Weaver of Grass said...

I like "growing shadow in a ring of stones" it really conjures up the walls of the barn getting higher.

S.L. Corsua said...

"Mantra" is spot on. Accepting change, into something else, or changing back to a previous form.

I've enjoyed reading your poetry here. "Brother Guy" and "Gardening Poem" have such wit and humor; I find myself grinning. "Sci-Fi Sonnet" is a favorite; its ending is a full blast of genius. Cheers.

Dominic Rivron said...

Thanks for all these comments. It's great to have feedback from people who read what you write - especially about what they like most :)

Poet in Residence said...

I'm reminded of old farmhouses and outbuildings like barns gently falling down subsiding with creak and groan each windswept North Walian winter perhaps never to be replaced, or if replaced perhaps by factory built or designer holiday homes or even executive retreats.
What can I find 'picking over' aside from weeds and nettles and broken nails and slates and a tumble of stones?
I went to Rhyd Ddu to meditate on my dad's funeral and 'picked over' the ruins of my grandparent's tithed cottage, dad's childhood home with its no-back door, hard by the quarry. It contained only a few uncurious sheep.

Dominic Rivron said...

Thanks for this. It's fascinating to know that a poem has such a personal resonance.

Singing Bear said...

I like this a lot. The slow but inevitable movement towards 'a field of stones' and 'light'. It makes the Second Law of Thermodynamics seem not such a bad thing! ;)

Dominic Rivron said...

Thanks for this. An interesting thought. You got me going to Wikipedia:

"In simple terms, the second law is an expression of the fact that over time, ignoring the effects of self-gravity, differences in temperature, pressure, and density tend to even out in a physical system that is isolated from the outside world."