Thursday, 25 September 2008

Dark Matter

Slight move-
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7 comments:

Pauline said...

I've read this through three times and each time I understand it differently. I never liked dissecting poems, preferring to swallow them whole like oysters, but this one is as intriguing in its parts as it is in its entirety.

The Weaver of Grass said...

Like it! But am preoccupied with how your spread on the page has changed! I wonder how you did that!

neverneutral said...

I really liked this one.

Dominic Rivron said...

Thanks for these comments everyone!

To change the blog template (well, at blogger.com) one route would be: (a) sign in, (b) select "layout",(c) click on "choose new template". Preview any template you fancy, select the one you decide on.

dick said...

Excellent. I like the hesitant, thinking-out-loud effect of the short lines and caesura across the stanzas. It's good to read poetry that pares back words and images.

The Weaver of Grass said...

On further reading of the poem - interesting but I need to think hard about it before I comment further.

Dominic Rivron said...

Thanks for the comment, Dick. I could say I'm into "pared back-ness" (well, I am) - but might contradict myself in the next thing I come up with... :)